Alternate beginning for my book.

I have been thinking about the beginning of my book. I am not sure if it attention grabbing enough. I have come up with an alternate beginning. See if you like it. Keep in mind it will just be place at the front of what I have already posted. I am not sure if I am including this section so it is still in a rough form.

A blinding flash of light and a thundering blast the Prima-cord detonated sending the ornate door crashing into the room.

“Go, go, go,” lead screamed into my ear.

My feet slammed onto the door as it hit the ground under my feet. I was the first in the room with Roberto right on my heels. Smoke from the blast obscured the room. Rifles readied we piled into the room. Wood and glass crunched under foot.

My feet tangled on a smashed piece of cabinet, causing me to stumble. Roberto advanced in front of me.

Blurring up from the couch a woman stood with a pistol in her hand. Barking once the small weapon fired. Roberto’s head snapped back, blood streaming from the exit wound.

I centered my sight picture on the woman. She’s turning her weapon in my direction. Squeezing the trigger almost caressing it I fired. A quick burst from my weapon splashed her all over the back wall. It’s a beautiful sight. It’s the sexiest way to look a woman, bloodily spattered all over the walls and the floor.

Roberto was always a stupid bastard now we are going to have haul his heavy ass out of here and find the stupid bullet case from the woman’s gun.

The target should be in her room. We don’t have much time. We shouldn’t have had to fire a shot we shouldn’t have to search the room for the bullet case. The staff would be calling the police. Lead headed off in the direction of the girl’s room. I followed closely on his heels. My rifle covering the left hand side as we traveled down the hall. Reaching the door to the girls room Lead took a Tranquilizer gun from his vest holster. Lead nodded his head; I reached out and opened the door. The target was out in the open. She was crossing the room, she must have been curious about the noise. Makes it easy for us.

With a little puff of air the dart sped out of Lead’s pistol and into the girls chest. She stood there looking at the dart stupidly for a couple of seconds. Then, her legs gave out and she toppled over. I gathered her in my arms and tossed her over my shoulder.

The trip back to the door was fast and uneventful. That’s good for us; we don’t have too much time.

“Two, get her into the van,” Lead ordered, “Three, get the bullet case if you can spot it quickly. Then, get Four’s body and get out of here. Don’t take more than thirty seconds.”

I raced to the van with the girl. I think that I crossed the distance in record time. The door slid open automatically.

“Was there any trouble Malloy,” The driver asked?

“Some, Roberto bought it.”

stupid weather

It is has been snowing outside. I really don’t care for snow in the spring. Just a couple days ago it was nice warm weather. Time to fly the kite and take Trajen to the park. Trajen loves parks. He loves to slide down slides. Big slides, little slides all slides he likes ‘em. Now it’s cold and wet and looks to be cold and wet for the rest of the week.

I am not really sure of the point of this post. If anyone has any Ideas please let me know.

Revison update.

I‘m finally done with this round of revisions. (Applause for author)

Hopefully the next round won’t be as difficult.

A different sort of "Savage Worlds" adventure

Inspired by a friend of mine (Richard) I purchased a new Role Playing Game book. The book is for the “Savage Worlds” game. It looks like and interesting gaming system. The rules look very simple and the game looks like it was designed for fast play. The rules are set up to cover any Genre. Tiffany wants me to work on a pirate adventure. I have been toying with a scenario in which Zombies attack our apartment building. Both games can be played with the same system. Cool huh.

But, that’s not the real reason that I am writing this blog. The real reason, I had an adventure in just getting the book. I bought the book on Saturday by Monday some of the pages were starting to come out of the binding. This is not really a problem as I was just going to have Kinko’s cut off the spine and have the book spiral bound.

I took the book to Kinko’s on Monday, they told me they could have it bound while I waited. So I was just chatting back and forth with the Guy who was doing the work. While he was punching the holes for the binding the said Oops.

Oops is never a good thing and I told him as much. He said, “No it’s not. I will show you what happened in just a second.”

The man continued to punch the holes once completed he brought it over for me to inspect. One section of the book had not been aligned correctly causing the holes to walk off the edge of the page. Only about the bottom third of the page could be correctly bound.

The man was obviously not happy about his work. He did suggest a couple of cosmetic fixes but still he was not pleased. I was not pleased with his work. I asked him for his suggestion. He sent me back to the Hobby store where I purchased the book to by another copy on his dime. I then brought back the book to his store where he rebound the book for me. When I told asked him how much I owed him he refused payment.

Who says Customer service is dead. I will be going back to that Kinko’s in the future.